Help with thesis assignment. needs editing/revision/re-arrangement.

I completed a thesis assignment that needs editing/revision/arranged effectively.

The instructor has provided me with feedback/corrections. 

Are you interested in assisting me with ongoing corrections/format?

Please use as much information I have written. 

But, please feel free to add/make up other information. 

Please note, I have included: 

1. Rubric 

2. Thesis assignment w/Pink feedback 

3. Technology and Access to Health Care Thesis Assignment

Currently I need help with implementing something motivating in the introduction (Per instructor feedback) “Motivated the reader to engage and continue reading with use of creativity in writing (2) – I suggested starting with a story but I am assuming you couldn’t find one? Keep looking. -” 

My suggestion is using the information of President Bush administration from the following paragraphs from Intro.

 Since the instructor states that information is not required “syllabus.” 

Can you please help me reorganize/edit my paper according to this outline: 

Organization of Content Main ideas arranged effectively (5) Level 1 Heading – Support Thesis using current academic articles and books and points of view/ or Describe subject & bioethical relevance using current academic articles (15) Argument well supported with references, ethical theory and principals Supporting argument 1 theory, 3 principles/ (15) Level 1 Heading – Opposing position supported by references, ethical theory and principals opposing argument 1 theory and 2 principles (15) The Arguments cannot use the same theory or principles Level 1 Heading – Flaws with either of the supporting/opposing arguments (5) (does not need to be both) Level 1 Heading – Faith Integration (10) Level 1 Heading – Value to Nursing using Standards of Practice/Code of Ethics/Social Policy Statement Integration & Clinical practice application (15) Stuff you need to integrate throughout: Supporting Material Quantity of resources (2) Variety of resources (2) Multidisciplinary resources (1) You must include the Annotated Bibliography & Reference page to obtain points (1) PLEASE let me know if you have any questions or concerns. please